2007-5-3 08:36 PM
kwan608
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[[i] 本帖最後由 kwan608 於 2007-5-3 08:42 PM 編輯 [/i]]
2007-5-3 11:08 PM
KION
Two months before Mary's birthday,peter [color=red]consider[/color](應該係過去式,不過驚串錯) saving money to buy Mary
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[color=red]an[/color] expensive present
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2007-5-4 07:24 AM
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Two months before Mary's birthday,peter [color=Red]considered[/color] saving money to buy Mary a expensive present - diamond ring.
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2007-5-4 12:43 PM
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[quote]原帖由 [i]angus[/i] 於 2007-5-4 07:24 AM 發表 [url=http://forum.8cyber.com/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=823661&ptid=14436647][img]http://forum.8cyber.com/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]
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2007-5-4 06:39 PM
angus
回復 #4 KION 的帖子
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2007-5-4 07:13 PM
kwan608
依家ko左份野了-口-"
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要多謝易走叔叔呢 xD..
2007-5-4 08:57 PM
angus
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2007-5-5 08:41 PM
kwan608
[quote]原帖由 [i]angus[/i] 於 4/5/2007 20:57 發表 [url=http://forum.8cyber.com/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=824214&ptid=14436647][img]http://forum.8cyber.com/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]
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